Thursday, October 16, 2008

Resurfaces

Across chrome alleys,

(brilliant though I am,)

untouched meditations of tribal villas

(jettisoned memories)

host sacred tablature

(slink in antiquated courtyards
depleted of artifacts;)

screaming obscenities

(yet civil guards tenuously remain)

—forgettable words

( ... )

which nobody recognize

(to scavenge for lost jettison)

nowadays

(like 'tatterdemalion'.)





for read write poem prompt #48: ("Tatterdemalion slink across chrome alleys ...")

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par·en·thet·i·cal • adj. of, relating to, or inserted as a parenthesis: ignore the parenthetical remarks that pockmark every page.

The Oxford Pocket Dictionary of Current English (2008)



The above form is what I call a parenthetical poem. A parenthetical poem can be read in three ways: as a whole, with the parenthetical "remarks" acting like a witty (or annoying) line-by-line rejoinder (the background breath); with the remarks removed; or by reading only the remarks.

The idea of the parenthetical derives from the double exposure, the form invented by Greg Williamson.

The poem above was made by taking the words from original poem in the above prompt


tatterdemalion slink across chrome alleys
villas deplete memories of sacred tablature
antiquated courtyards host tribal artifacts
which nobody recognizes nowadays remain
untouched yet civil guards scream obscenities
lost meditation resurfaces I brilliant though
forgettable words tenuously scavenge jettison


and remaking it as a parenthetical poem. (All the words from original poem are used with a couple of grammatical inflections imployed.)