Friday, January 30, 2009

O, a deer



U.S. President Barack Obama walks
the wintry path to the Oval Office
(photo: Jason Reed/Reuters)



1.
freshly fallen snow
ominously crookèd limbs
meeting south lawn's brush

lonely winter deer
a confident leader's walk
the White House: next stop

2.
camera's f-stop
aperture setting for snow
capturing O's walk

O's sauntering limbs
behind: a camouflaged deer
painting with broad brush

3.
from snow-dappled brush
dazzled doe comes to full-stop:
photograph's lone deer

ignoring brief snow
beneath the snow-laden limbs
the new leader walks

4.
the new leader walks
in front of snow-dappled brush
beneath snowy limbs

doe comes to full-stop
dappling January's snow:
photograph's lone deer

5.
background: hidden deer
foreground: leader's stately walk
f-stop set for snow

painting with broad brush
camera's shutter freeze-stops
O's sauntering limbs

6.
beneath crookèd limbs
walking past lone winter deer
the White House: next stop

the new leader walks
passing White House south lawn's brush:
freshly fallen snow

Haiku.
behind snowy limbs
a lone deer in frozen stop:
she brushes O's walk




a (haiku-)sestina using photo-inspired (not actually random) end-words: snow limbs brush deer walk stop

doubly prompted by read write poem's prompt #63: sestina, randomly (gypo) and totally optional prompts' Intersections (rfp)


11 comments:

  1. Hi phil, this is so cool! As if a Sestina wasn't difficult enough to write you accelerate the form throwing Haiku at it! Amazing!

    6* Walk past / passing just a silly billy thought.

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  2. It looks like you've created a new form!

    I loved the 'snow-dappled brush' and all the different things you did with limbs.

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  3. Thanks!

    (changed "past the" to "passing" in 6.5 — thanks STG!)

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  4. Hi Phil, I was thinking of 6.2 which I think is the only line that has a syllable too many.

    Anyway, great concept!

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  5. Oh yea.

    Now 6.2 is walking past lone winter deer (not "lonely")

    Thnx again.

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  6. Just thinking: A haiku-sestina (above) is 13*17 = 221 syllables. The only reference I found to this number is

    "221 Syllables at Rocky Mountain Dharma Center", Allen Ginsberg, White Shroud: Poems 1980-1985, Harper and Row, 1986.
    [13 Haiku on p. 41.]

    (There must be something numerological about 221?)

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  7. Just amazing! I can't imagine how difficult this must have been to write!

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  8. How clever and unusual. And the piece had such a rhythm that I could almost feel his footsteps and the urgency and energy.

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  9. with a wave and smile.... beautiful

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