Thursday, April 16, 2009

missing something


I looked for my spirit:
I found it had split.

I looked for my soul:
It went down a black hole.

I looked for humanity:
I saw Sean Hannity.

I pined for some trees:
I found LCDs.

I looked for a shrine:
I found it online.




for Read Write Poem: missing something


9 comments:

  1. sarahApril 17, 2009 at 4:06 AM

    I like this, it is very clean and strong.

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  2. AnonymousApril 17, 2009 at 5:12 AM

    Seems your missing quite a few things. I think my shrine is found online too.

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  3. Bsquared86April 17, 2009 at 8:11 AM

    Love the rhythm and structure. And kudos for the Hannity jab! My favorite line is "I pined for some trees," very clever!

    Thank you for sharing!

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  4. gautami tripathyApril 17, 2009 at 9:29 AM

    Reflects the present attitude, world or what have you!

    will you come into my parlour?

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  5. rob kistnerApril 17, 2009 at 11:31 AM

    I was quite taken by this post.

    I love the punch this packs -- well done…

    I invite you to come discover what’s Gone.

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  6. AnonymousApril 17, 2009 at 3:50 PM

    "I looked for my soul:
    It went down a black hole."

    Boy! You hit me where it hurts with those words LOL.

    GREAT poem!

    http://lori102870.blogspot.com/2009/04/in-your-absencenapowrimo-17-part-2by-me.html

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  7. Wayne PitchkoApril 17, 2009 at 8:00 PM

    I like this

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  8. PaulApril 17, 2009 at 10:57 PM

    I was thinking Phil, that you are one of the most radical writers I know. The way weave complex ideas and tremendous erudition into such simple forms. And there is never a syllable out of place, they look effortless. But the discipline and the focus on rhyme and meter is, these days, a form of radicalism in writing and and increasingly necessary one. Bravo to you.

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  9. PamApril 18, 2009 at 7:23 AM

    Black hole and Sean Hannity says it all.

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