Thursday, December 18, 2008

perceptions




        marea roja by ladyorlando




    fishies see*
                                        sea ahead
    lash their tails
                                        left and right
    mermaids/men
                                        turn their head
    keep their flanks
                                        in their sight

    fishies: shark!
                                        they must flee!
    they are the
                                        hunted one
    mermaids/men
                                        hunters be
    spear the fish?
                                        just for fun?



for read write poem image prompt #5, marea roja (other poems)
and (collaborative) prompt #57: 'tis the season ... (9. rob kistner - e.e. cummings)

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* howstuffworks: Fish


Almost all fish focus their eyes by using their eye muscles to change the position of the lens rather than by changing the shape of the lens or cornea [as the higher vertebrates do.]

[F]ish swim by lashing their tails from side to side. When the tail is whipped in one direction, the front part of the body tends to turn the opposite way. Water pressure resists the turning movement and changes it into a forward motion.



7 comments:

  1. I enjoyed the rhythm running through this and building up in the rhymed stanza.

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  2. I fond the steady 3 count of the phrases to be riveting, almost hypnotic... well done! ;)

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  3. Great! I love the way this reads like a chant. Skillfully done!

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  4. Excellent in many ways -- to add one thing to what others have said, I like how the two column structure seems to echo the appearance of the image as a pair of facing pages.

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  5. Thanks for the comments gautami, watermaid, rob, SweetTalkingGuy, throwshiswords!

    It was a great photo/drawing to work with.

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  6. hello, philo!

    Reading your poem in its back-and-forthness must be how the fishies feel, reading with those fisheyes.

    Nice work! ~Angie

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