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for read write poem prompt #51: peel the onion
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based on the "square dance" form in reading 'round the square
(an example of a "pattern poem")
unraveled, or "peeled" (in verse form):
my outermost layer
reveals little
expression of skins
sunken sub-rim
the peel below
who knows
something more
ef'n beast
being at
the
ego's din
nub
• crisp-edged concrete format
ReplyDelete• kick-ass introspection
• very damned cool
FUN! I love calligrammes! Excellent poem.
ReplyDeleteSimply divine!
ReplyDeleteribbons of her thoughts
This is amazing. Even more amazing that you managed to get such substance in so few lines.
ReplyDeleteThanks; and thanks too to all the comments.
ReplyDeleteOnce you have a table layout, there are only so many cells where you can put letters/words (sort of like a small scrabble board)!
This was quite absorbing. Having to carefully 'read' your way 'round heightened the words and meanings.
ReplyDeleteA fine experience for me... ;)