fishies see*
sea ahead
lash their tails
left and right
mermaids/men
turn their head
keep their flanks
in their sight
fishies: shark!
they must flee!
they are the
hunted one
mermaids/men
hunters be
spear the fish?
just for fun?
for read write poem image prompt #5, marea roja (other poems)
and (collaborative) prompt #57: 'tis the season ... (9. rob kistner - e.e. cummings)
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* howstuffworks: Fish
Almost all fish focus their eyes by using their eye muscles to change the position of the lens rather than by changing the shape of the lens or cornea [as the higher vertebrates do.]
[F]ish swim by lashing their tails from side to side. When the tail is whipped in one direction, the front part of the body tends to turn the opposite way. Water pressure resists the turning movement and changes it into a forward motion.
I find it very sweet. Visually too.
ReplyDeletebooking through myth or reality?
I enjoyed the rhythm running through this and building up in the rhymed stanza.
ReplyDeleteI fond the steady 3 count of the phrases to be riveting, almost hypnotic... well done! ;)
ReplyDeleteGreat! I love the way this reads like a chant. Skillfully done!
ReplyDeleteExcellent in many ways -- to add one thing to what others have said, I like how the two column structure seems to echo the appearance of the image as a pair of facing pages.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comments gautami, watermaid, rob, SweetTalkingGuy, throwshiswords!
ReplyDeleteIt was a great photo/drawing to work with.
hello, philo!
ReplyDeleteReading your poem in its back-and-forthness must be how the fishies feel, reading with those fisheyes.
Nice work! ~Angie